Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises

Delacroix, Faust Trying to Seduce Margarete (detail)

Delacroix, Faust Trying to Seduce Margarete (detail)

Over the weekend, I was a speaker at the Missouri Writers Guild conference (a terrific group of people and an impeccably run event). One of my sessions focused on evaluating the first page of your novel or memoir manuscript.

Here are 3 of the best exercises or tasks you might undertake when thinking about your first page and how you can improve it before sending it to agents or editors.

  1. What is the absolute latest moment in the manuscript you can begin your story, and still not leave out anything that’s critical to the story problem? Most manuscripts I read should really start somewhere between page 5 and page 30. Be ruthless in evaluating your opening—have you dawdled in revealing the story problem? It ought to be seeded on page 1.
  2. What details do NOT relate to the story problem or the protagonist? We rarely need the complete biography of your main character on the first page. Let those details emerge as the story unfolds. Don’t share the everyday, mundane details we could guess. Share the most unique, special, distinctive details—the ones that really matter to the story and character from the start. The No. 1 mistake for first pages is overwriting—or working too hard at “painting a picture.” If you load up on every single detail, how am I supposed to know which ones are important? Be selective. Be artful.
  3. Have you shown or described something that really ought to be quickly summarized (or “told”)? Sometimes writers go into flowery description about something that should be flat-out stated. Admittedly, this is an issue that will remain relevant on every single page of your book. Joyce Carol Oates once said, “Storytelling is shaped by two contrary, yet complementary, impulses—one toward brevity, compactness, artful omission; the other toward expansion, amplification, enrichment.” When it comes to impatient editors and agents, favor brevity and artful omission in your opening pages.

Bonus tip: Highlight every adjective, adverb, and modifying phrase. Do you need them all? Start pruning!

If you enjoyed this advice, you can check out my basic slide presentation on evaluating your first page. (If the slideshow doesn’t appear below, click here.)


Upcoming Online Classes

Posted in Writing Advice and tagged , , , .
Jane Friedman

Jane Friedman

Jane Friedman (@JaneFriedman) has 20 years of experience in the publishing industry, with expertise in digital media strategy for authors and publishers. She is the co-founder and editor of The Hot Sheet, the essential newsletter on the publishing industry for authors.

Jane currently teaches writing and publishing at the University of Virginia and is a columnist for Publishers Weekly. The Great Courses just released her 24-lecture series, How to Publish Your Book. She also has a book forthcoming from the University of Chicago Press, The Business of Being a Writer (2017).

Jane speaks regularly at conferences and industry events such as BookExpo America, Digital Book World, and the AWP Conference, and has served on panels with the National Endowment for the Arts and the Creative Work Fund. Find out more.

Join the conversation

35 Comments on "Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises"

Notify of
avatar

Sort by:   newest | oldest | most voted
Jim Hamlett
4 years 11 days ago

When I sent my manuscript off to an editor, I got back the typical red ink markings on the first few pages. But at the beginning of the third scene (about 10 pages in), I had a HUGE note that said, “I strongly recommend you start the story here!” 

Like most writers, I’d sweated blood over those pages. It was some of my “best writing.” But I followed her advice. Hopefully, the readers of this post will follow yours (good, as usual). Kudos, Jane.

Jael Richardson
Jael Richardson
4 years 11 days ago

I’m in the last stages of editing my first book. My editor has been telling me the same kinds of things, but I’m a checklist person. These three steps are so helpful!

Cgblake Author
Cgblake Author
4 years 11 days ago

Jane,
Excellent advice. I would add if you don’t have the resources to hire a book editor to review your MS at least hire one to look at the first 50 pages.

Sharon
Sharon
4 years 11 days ago

Great advice.

Jodi Lobozzo Aman
4 years 11 days ago

Love the Joyce Carol Oates quote!
http://www.healnowandforever.net

Heidi Lee Munson
4 years 11 days ago

Thank you for sharing, Jane – especially the tip about highlighting adjectives and adverbs. My editor has really been helping me to scale back, and this advice is so valuable. Hope to see you in Muncie in July!

Susielindau
Susielindau
4 years 11 days ago

Great advice! Thanks for sharing!

Darrelyn Saloom
4 years 11 days ago

Great advice, Jane. I just had the first five chapters of memoir collaboration cut by the publisher. I had to go back and sprinkle information crucial to the story, write new scenes, remove others. 

Bottom line: I could have saved loads of time if I had started in the right place. But the revisions were worthwhile because with each round of edits, I (along with @dzmalone:twitter ) pruned adjectives, adverbs, and those pesky modifying phrases.

Sharon Hamilton
Sharon Hamilton
4 years 11 days ago

Great post. Valuable lessons to learn before you send that ms off!

Zena
Zena
4 years 11 days ago

What do you mean – phones and alarms?

Sasha M Hitchner
4 years 10 days ago

As always – great advice! Thanks Jane.

sunffy
sunffy
4 years 10 days ago

Your bonus tip is bad advice. Those parts of speech exist for a reason. 

KathyPooler
KathyPooler
4 years 10 days ago

Jane,
I really appreciate these very succinct , no-nonsense guidelines for making the first page work of a manuscript work. Your statement about  how”action needs to be in context, be as grounded as possible in a character that the reader is already in love with” really resonated with me (action with character) as did the “memoir red flags.” Wow, the only way to achieve that is by accepting that “writing is rewriting.” This is a post I’ll bookmark to use as a guideline for  deciding where  and how I will step into my memoir. Thank you for a great post!

Marilynslagel
Marilynslagel
4 years 10 days ago

Jane, I’m so glad you shared this here.  I attended your early a.m. session, but had to miss this one.  Now I have info on both!  It was great meeting you over the weekend.  The conference was so inspiring thanks to you and the other speakers. 

Lynn Obermoeller
Lynn Obermoeller
4 years 10 days ago

Your workshop was incredibly helpful and I can’t wait to use your advice on my own manuscript. Thank you!

Melanie Marttila
Melanie Marttila
4 years 10 days ago

Excellent advice, as ever.  I tend to be wordy and descriptive, but I’m learning, thanks to several well-timed posts like this one, that “tell” isn’t necessarily a four-letter-word.  You just have to be careful about what you tell 🙂

Laura
Laura
4 years 10 days ago

Hi Jane,
Thanks for the advice. A couple of questions though.This post seems directed mostly toward fiction writers. My book is self help. Do the same three tips apply.

The second question is on your third point. My writing coach used to really hammer us to “show” not “tell.” Where does one find the balance especially in a non-fiction book?

Thanks.

Josh Hogg
4 years 10 days ago

Some great thoughts here Jane, thanks for this. Your slide show was also helpful, though… it would have been nice to hear your lovely voice along side it! 

Linda Woods
4 years 10 days ago

This advice came with perfect timing for me, as pretty much all of your tips do — I think that’s always so amazing. Now, I’m starting to count the adverbs and adjectives. haha But seriously, this is great advice. It will be a big help to me.

trackback

[…] janefriedman.com – Today, 9:45 AM […]

T.W. Fendley
T.W. Fendley
4 years 6 days ago

Thanks again, Jane. I appreciated your review of my first page at the conference. The prologue is now history and the first two pages are pared down to one.

It’s funny how things like your three tasks seem perfectly clear when you hear about them, but totally baffling in application. Fingers crossed that I “got it” this time!

trackback
Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises | BRAVEHEART
4 years 3 days ago

[…] Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises. – 3 of the best exercises or tasks you might undertake when thinking about your first page and how you can improve it before sending it to agents or editors. […]

Beckydwriter
4 years 3 days ago

LOVE–and HATE–task number one because I’ve had to re-do and re-do and re-do for that exact reason. But you’re spot on – I’d put all the “necessary” back story in the first 5 pages rather than threading it throughout the tale. Still struggle with this on every new manuscript – argh.

Elissa Field
4 years 3 days ago

Jane, thanks for this.  I am on my way to a workshop on openings tomorrow — with 14 fellow workshopper manuscripts to comment on beforehand — so reading this was the perfect starter for my morning. 

trackback

[…] head over to writer and editor Jane Friedman’s blog to read Perfecting Your First Page: Three Tasks or Exercises. Share this:EmailPrintTwitterDiggFacebookStumbleUponRedditLike this:LikeBe the first to like this […]

trackback

[…] This is just one of Jane Friedman’s great writing tips: Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises:  https://janefriedman.com/2012/04/23/perfecting-your-first-page/ […]

trackback

[…] Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises — Jane Friedman […]

trackback

[…] Perfecting Your First Page: 3 Tasks or Exercises […]

trackback

[…] Perfecting Your First Page [especially helpful if you're sending the first 1-5 pages along with your query] […]

wpDiscuz